resume.You can correct any mistakes you find in them.
I’d appreciate it if you could help me revise them. Looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
名师点评
1．覆盖了所有的内容要点并且适当发挥，交代了事情的前因后果，使得文章的语境更加充分，符合逻辑。
2．用了较多的高级词汇，如：extra，reduce，application，attachment等。熟练运用了一些短语如：ask sb.for help，reduce one’s burden，catch one’s eye，refer to等，使文章生动。
3．所用句式灵活多变。文章中使用了多种句式，如I’m not sure if...，which引导的定语从句，I’d appreciate it if you could do...等。
4．恰当使用了语句间的连接成分，如：in order to...，but使得全文结构紧凑，上下文连贯，衔接自然。
(二)
(2015·全国Ⅰ)
假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊登介绍美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友彼得写信约稿，要点如下： 1．栏目介绍； 2．稿件内容；
3．稿件长度：约400词； 4．交稿日期：6月28日前。 注意：1.词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3．开头语已为你写好。 Dear Peter，
I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper. 满分作文 Dear Peter，
I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper. The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular among us
students.It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries.Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States? And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals，and the life of American high school students.You can write anything relevant so long as it’s interesting and informative.400 words would be fine.Could we have your article before June 28?
I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours，
Li Hua
名师点评
1．覆盖了所有的内容要点。
2．应用了较多的高级词汇和短语，如：relevant，informative，carry articles，spend holidays and festivals等。这使文章增色不少。
3．句式丰富多变。文章中使用了多种句式，如how引导的宾语从句，so long as引导的条件状语从句，非谓语动词短语written by...，以及客套委婉词would的恰当运用等。
