上海高考英语作文要求：
内容： 观点明确，内容充实， 理由充分.
语言： 表达正确，语言流畅 , 用词恰当， 句式多样化. 组织结构： 结构正确，上下文连贯一致
低分作文的类型
（以2008年上海高考作文为例） Guided Writing:
你班将组队参加学校组织的集体舞比赛（group dancing competition),班长希望大家积极参与。对此谈谈你的想法。你的文章必须包括以下内容：·你是否会参加比赛,·你做出该决定的具体理由:
一、对文字提示及要求只字不提的
E.g. I will take part in the group dancing competition for several reasons…
E.g. The monitor asked me to join in the group dancing competition for our class, and I agreed…
二、开篇的文字描述“发挥”的太多的
E.g. I love dancing very much. However, since I came to study in this school, I have had no chance to show off my skills. Yesterday our monitor said that a group dancing competition will be held in our school, I was very excited. I was sure that my chance finally came…
三、离题：通篇谈论一些与主题无关宏旨的内容，直到文章结尾才表明观点的 E.g. …first of all, I am a good friend of our monitor, so…;second, I have attended a dancing school when I was a little girl/boy, and I think I can dance the best in the whole school; lastly I think dancing is a kind of good sport. If I …,I am sure I will… In a word, I will take part in…
四、离题：通篇空发议论，似乎关注国计民生，实则离题万里， 五、语法、文字错误连篇，文理不通的 六、字迹潦草、难辨的
七、通篇文章从头至尾涂涂改改的
高分作文训练建议
一、学会确定主题，亮明观点 08年上海卷
The monitor said that our class would join in the group dancing competition to be held by our school and that he wished the whole class to take an active part in it. As a great dance lover, I certainly will enter for this event. 二、学会铺架龙骨，确立文章雏形 Notice
Our monitor suggests that we have “Friday News Hour”. But some classmates do not agree. We will have a class meeting in English tomorrow afternoon to discuss this suggestion. Please prepare your talk and take an
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active part. May 6th, 2008. ? 内容要点：
? 1、你对“周五读报活动”的看法； ? 2、陈述你的理由（可举例说明）； ? 3、你的具体建议。
1、I think it really is a creative idea.
2、It will help us learn more about English in current use.
3、It will keep us informed of what is going on outside of the school.
4、The class is broken into several groups, each responsible for a few passages.
5、If well organized and well done, this activity will be an effective supplement to our English studies.
三、学会段落的拓展方法及用词和句式
第一句I think it really is a creative idea.后可添加：and I’m sure it will benefit the students a great deal.
第二句It will help us learn more about English in current use.后可添加：for articles in newspapers, written in present-day English, tend to be more lively than those in the textbooks. Thus we can enlarge our vocabulary and deepen our understanding of the uses of some words.
第三句It will keep us informed of what is going on outside of the school.后可添加：so that we may further broaden our horizons and further develop our interest in English.
第四句The class is broken into several groups, each responsible for a few passages.后可添加：for example, we may have each group write a summary of the article assigned to them, or prepare four to five questions or even do a presentation in class in their favourite way. 四、学会修词炼句
1-1 We should remember that every minute is very important. 1-2 We should bear in mind that every minute matters/counts. 2-1 There was growing unemployment in the 1990s in Japan. 2-2 The 1990s witnessed growing unemployment in Japan. 2-3 Japan underwent growing unemployment in the 1990s. 3-1 As we all know, China is becoming more and more important in the world. 3-2 As we all know, China is playing an increasingly important role worldwide. 4-1 This new type of personal computer is very easy to use. 4-2 This new type of personal computer is quite user-friendly. 5-1 What sounds good may not be good in use. 5-2 What is pleasing to the ear may not be good in practice. 1-1 She lost her way in the woods, so she could only sit there and weep.
1-2 Losing her way in the woods, she could do nothing but sit there and weep. 2-1 If you have traveled far and wide, you will want to learn more about the world. 2-2 The more you have traveled, the more you will want to learn about the world. 3-1 Teachers always urge their students to work hard.
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3-2 Teachers are always urging their students to study hard. 4-1 He was such a man, who is a great thinker but cares little for clothing. 4-2 Such was the man, deep in thinking but plain in clothing. 5-1 Reading for pleasure is very important. We must put as much value on it as possible. 5-2 Reading for pleasure is of prime importance. We can never put enough value on it.
五、学会写好精巧的结语
回应主题式的结尾（以08年上海卷为例）
Since group dancing can not only train my team spirit but promote the friendship between the students, why should I not participate in it? 升华主题式的结尾（以08年陕西卷为例）
I’m sure that “Friday News Hour” will greatly benefit everyone who takes an active part in it and probably much more than could be expected right now. 08 上海卷英语高考作文例文1
A group dancing competition will be held in our school and our class monitor expects us to take an active part in this meaningful activity. As a family member of my class, I will definitely take advantage of this opportunity to show my dancing talent and win honor for my class.
As everyone knows that dancing is one of the exciting sports that can not only strengthen our lung and muscle but also release ourselves when we are under great pressure of entrance examination. So it is a very helpful sports for our busy students. Besides, we are required to cooperate well while dancing and in this way it helps to cultivate our team spirits which is extremely vital in our future life.
From the two reasons I mentioned above, I am sure that I can benefit a lot from this wonderful competition. 143 words 例文2
Today the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in the group dancing competition which will be held in a couple of days in our school. But after some careful consideration, I have decided not to participate.
There are a number of reasons for my decision. First and foremost, as the College Entrance Exam is just around the corner, study is the top priority for me. Participating in the group dancing competition has to give way because it might take me too much time.
What’s more, without any experience of dancing, I don’t think I can be a good dancing partner. I am afraid my poor dancing skills will probably spoil the performance of the whole class. In this case, it’s better for me to be a spectator cheering for my classmates.
For these reasons, it seems more appropriate for me to watch the competition than to dance myself.
09春考作文题
假如你是李敏，给你的外国朋友Linda写一封信。信中必须包括以下内容：
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1.邀请她参观2010年上海世博会 2. 描述你身边与世博有关的一二件事 3. 说明这（些）事对改善城市生活的影响 Dear Linda,
How are you these days? And here I have something special for you.
As you know, the 2010 Expo is a big event to be held in Shanghai. And I’d like to invite you to this big event as a citizen of Shanghai. I’m sure coming to the Expo will prove a unique experience for you. In fact, the Expo has already begun to show its influence on life in Shanghai now.
On the government’s side, a lot of plans have been made to beautify the city. For example, more trees have been planted to improve the air quality, reduce the noise and make the city look better. What’s more, some new regulations such as the ban on smoking at certain public places will also make the city seem more welcome and inviting to the visitors. While on the citizens’ side, an increase in people’s enthusiasm in learning English and improving manners appears with the Expo drawing near. And everyone pays attention to the countdown of the event since they are eager to play their part well as hosts.
Well, as you can see from the above, the Expo is motivating the whole city to improve and perfect her image. And that’s exactly the message conveyed by the theme of the Expo, “Better city, better life.” I sincerely hope that the passion of Shanghainese will help the whole world to create better city life.
And I’ll be glad if you can come here to witness the success of Expo together with me as well as enjoy yourself. I am looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Li Min
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